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Love Like the Ocean
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This story is very grasping and verbally visual, and paints a picture with almost eevry sentence.
“On the nightstand, the clock-face has a badly painted Elvis caught in mid-gyrate.” This sentence paints a great picture, and molds a visual bubble of what the room might include, with the nightstand hardly noticed behind a room of toys and junk.
“The crows are tiny black dots against a faded denim sky. In the distance, I hear a speedboat. For the last week I have been dreaming about the ocean-lapping softly against the hull of the boat, hissing as it rolls gravel up a beach, ocean swells hammering the shore.” This little section is very interesting and gives a great picture into what the dreams and thoughts of the ocean are so riveting and inspiring to his feelings out at sea.
“The fog and clouds smeared the lines between land and sea and sky. He faded in and out of view as the fog rolled by. He wore the same clothes he’d had on the day he left, a red plaid shirt, black jeans and the John Deere baseball cap Dad had given him.” This scene describes landscape of the scene and how it enhances the character personality, with describing what he see’s in his dreams, and how his dreams seem to describe everything to a dime.
These passages from the story may not have a dramatic effect on the story, but it shows the detail, and sets the tone for every scene.